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Dec 10, 2004 0:54:08 GMT -5
Post by Kenja on Dec 10, 2004 0:54:08 GMT -5
Shouts of piercing torment, running through my head. Limp you drop before me, with the ground stained red.
I stare into the darkness, which used to be your eyes. The tears stream down my face, as my spirit slowly dies.
Your smile was the world, and your voice heaven's carress. My heart was overjoyed, on the day that you said yes.
But now those days are ending, as you slowly start to die. On the outside I am screaming, and on the inside I just cry.
After you stop breathing, and the sorrow starts to pass. The emptiness tears trough me, like shards of broken glass.
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Desce
Apprentice Wolf Pup
A lone wolf needs a pack to survive
Posts: 46
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Dec 10, 2004 4:42:09 GMT -5
Post by Desce on Dec 10, 2004 4:42:09 GMT -5
Wow, that was beyond words.
I loved it.
It makes me think of a story I am writing called Heart of a wolf. In it, one of the wolves ends up dying in a dream, and the person who was in love with her looks upon her as the person in your poem does.
I liked it alot good job
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Dec 10, 2004 5:26:18 GMT -5
Post by Indis on Dec 10, 2004 5:26:18 GMT -5
* A tear falls down my cheak* My love thats the most saddest touching poem. *holds close* I hope that does not come to pass my love.
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Sabin
Pack Member
A lone wolk is either a survivor or a brute
Posts: 217
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Dec 10, 2004 13:02:39 GMT -5
Post by Sabin on Dec 10, 2004 13:02:39 GMT -5
*tears streeming down muzzle* NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!
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Dec 11, 2004 18:39:52 GMT -5
Post by chipweter91 on Dec 11, 2004 18:39:52 GMT -5
makes me cry. Great story. Brilliant, simply brilliant. Two paws way way up!!! Loved it. Very depressing though.....
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